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furry arts discussion => poetry corner => Topic started by: Apollo the Incinermyn on October 10, 2010, 10:03:42 pm
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Hmm... I'd been mulling it over for a few days and finally
worked myself into a tantrum, panicking over decided I wanted to post some of my poetry here (the little of it that I have). So before I talk myself out of it once again by agonizing over just how bad I know my poems are and how much I know everyone's going to hate me for posting it here I've got here a few short poems I wrote for a Creative Writing class back in junior college. Now, I have to admit this before I post them my skills, or lack there of, in the poetic arts are absolutely abominable at best poetry isn't my strongsuit... Even so, I hope these go well though I know just how bad they really are... *shivers*
1.) A wolf and rabbit
near sunrise meet. Wolf is fed.
The rabbit is dead.
2.) In the lake water,
an eagle spots its next meal.
A largemouth bass.
3.) After suppertime,
the pack turned their faces skyward,
baying at the moon.
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You know I just can't approve of the carnivorousness themes. I mean couldn't the last line of number one be: The rabbit had fled. And what is the rule on the haiku again, 5-7-5? Or can that be flexible. I'm not a haiku-er so I really don't know.
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There used to be an old haiku thread... I miss it so much :'(
What life gave to us
was quickly taken away
and returned no more
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You know I just can't approve of the carnivorousness themes. I mean couldn't the last line of number one be: The rabbit had fled. And what is the rule on the haiku again, 5-7-5? Or can that be flexible. I'm not a haiku-er so I really don't know.
Hmm... I think I might've chosen carnivorous themes out of instinct or something, trying not to make myself sound like a wimp...not sure... Anyways, yeah, 5-7-5 is the rule for haiku and a very strict one at that. If memory serves, the first two are just short poems because they're one syllable too short (and I only re-edited them because my professor said they sounded better that way); but then, looking them over, maybe they are haikus after all...I haven't touched these in a few years, I was just thinking of them as something to post quick.
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Must try to write some haikus for upcoming FCN conbook.
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And I was thinking about trying some more, just to see what I can come up with. Good luck with yours, Rocket.