an attempt on poetry

[Ragnorrock_13]

Ti's a pity, that this city,
has banned me from its doors.
My life, my love,
is not for me no more.
I must flee, from this city
or else declare war.
I am a monster,
who cowers from the light,
from mankind's cruelty
and titanic might.

I live on my own.
Enduring the heat
and chilling to the bone.
I do not belong to this world,
and this world does not belong to me.
I must flee this world,
and let the residence bee.

Please, criticize him all you want. I'm tired of doing so.

[PupLilith17]

thats awesome
(im bad at critisism so i cant give any)

[Ragnorrock_13]

Thank you. There's more.

Here I am at world end,
as nature fights and strains,
to fix and mend.
I have reached my destination,
only to be stopped by others desperation.
I see with my own eyes the one before me.
and yet, I do not understand,
for whom lye's before the,
is me.

There I stand, but here I am.
How can this be?
How is it me?
Yet there I am, and here I stand
at the world end.
As nature fights and strains,
to fix and mend.
 
I fight to flee, to be free,
and yet there I see,
as I fight to return and to see
the other me...

[socal Rocky]

I give you big props for using rhyme in a poem. It's very hard. The one main critique I would make is that some of the lines are noticeably longer than the rest in that stanza. You shouldn't lengthen a line just to reach a word that fits your rhyming scheme or else those lines feel "out of breath" and stretched. It's a big challenge, but I look at this poem as a whole and I know you have what it takes to make it work.

Keep it up