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Offline The Rockin Hyena

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My best friend ever!
« on: July 10, 2014, 04:36:17 pm »
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Re: My best friend ever!
« Reply #1 on: July 10, 2014, 05:49:09 pm »
It doesn't suck, I liked it. It conveyed the message just as the poem is meant to. I think you just need to work on the formatting so it's easier to read and make connections between the rhyming words.

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She was put in a cage
Yet she did not show rage
She was mistreated and malnourished
Her eyes showed despair
I could only stand and stare

When I bought her freedom
She nuzzled me
It was like she was thanking me for setting her free
She liked to play and wrestle
For it was never a hassle

She would sleep with her head in my lap
For her it was a good place to nap
She taught me how to wine, screech and growl
When we played tug of war with a towel
I was sad when we had to part
She had found a place in my heart

I never knew an animal could show so much love
She might have been an angel from above
Today I learned that she died
Today I cried
I would never trade her memory, no way!
I still think about her every single day.

~

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Re: My best friend ever!
« Reply #2 on: July 10, 2014, 09:50:47 pm »
I'm glad that you liked it and yes it looks much better the way that you laid it out. :)