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Offline WhiteAkitaKeiko

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Suppressed Pain
« on: November 19, 2013, 10:23:53 am »
Time is our concern
Whoever seeks the past?

The men whose has been hurt.
For means is always deep inside.

The pain will be not omitted.
Whom seeks the truth,
For it, is near.

Exuberance never fade, it's us whom changes the fate
Our spirit is being crushed.


The animal falls, so hopeless.
The tears fall on bloody floor,
Darkness laugh.

There we stand, fighting with ourselves.
Naught can be done.

Its too late now, the eyes already see the light.
Now it's all over, everything is completely blank



I felt down today, so I wrote a poem. Comments are welcome  :)
« Last Edit: December 02, 2013, 05:40:41 am by WhiteAkitaKeiko »
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Offline Hesper Scott

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Re: Suppressed Pain
« Reply #1 on: December 01, 2013, 10:50:13 pm »
I was expecting some emo drivel (I suppose I read one too many poems on Quizilla) but it was actually an excellent poem. Although, I think you made a typo with "tears falls". I think you meant "tears fall".
Whenever I see these signatures, I feel like I should use mine to say something really interesting and profound, but I always end up with some generic quote or saying. Hmm. That's unfortunate. Well, now guess who looks like a excessively meta killjoy. I do!

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Re: Suppressed Pain
« Reply #2 on: December 02, 2013, 05:43:52 am »
Thank you Hesper for your kind words  :)

And yes, I made a typo, but I corrected it, thanks for notifying me  :D .

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