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Offline Seelas

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« on: July 24, 2005, 10:43:35 pm »
So this is a pretty important character in my game project, but it's my first time drawing her as I've always had trouble with felines. Strangely, I think I got the head down more or less ok, but the arms and hands seem off. And if there's anything else that's wrong, I'd appreciate your comments on that too. Be honest - I'm looking to improve.  '<img'> I guess I should warn you: she is quite scantily clad, although nothing explicit is revealed. There's a plot reason for that that I can explain if anyone's interested, but I just didn't want anyone to be shocked or upset with what they saw.

Anyways, here it is.
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« Reply #1 on: July 25, 2005, 12:15:33 am »
Your pencil work is very nice. Lines have varied weights, and flow nicely. The composition is interesting, with the fluid flow of the body and the neat shapes formed by the limbs, hair, and background space. The torso is well-formed, and the face looks nice. A soft, gentle expression on this one.

I would suggest looking at photo references, both for human and feline anatomy. For the human parts, look at the musculature of the arms, and length of limbs. Her arms appear far thinner than average, and longer too. Most human arms are long enough so the fingertips go a little lower than the bottom of the crotch, when the arms hang at the sides. The breasts are well-formed, but the clavicles (collar bones) are a bit too high and too pronounced. Also check the fingers... they're all around the same length in your sketch, and they're not that way in humans. EDIT: Also, the hands on humans are about 3/4 the length of the face. Put your hand up against your own face, with the base of the palm at your chin. Your fingers should extend well up onto your forehead. Use that as a guage for paw size in anthro critters.

Reference for human with similar build

The feline parts are mostly correct, compared to felines in the real world. Photo references will help you find those differences. The chin on a real cat sticks out only beneath the corners of the mouth... on yours, the jawline is a little too rounded. Also, your stripe patterns are all so similar, they look like they're painted on the figure. Varying the size and shape of them will make them look more natural.


Another tiger ref, in PNG.

I think the image has much potential. You have a great start. I'm only offering some suggestions on things to pay attention to for the future.




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« Reply #2 on: July 25, 2005, 02:07:58 am »
well i think it is good it just needs coloring
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« Reply #3 on: July 25, 2005, 02:16:56 am »
On her right (her left) arm, try to fix the part where her forearm connects to her upper arm. Then try to work on the hand a bit.

Everything else looks good, But where you have her fur line changed by her left (your right) side, it looks like thats where her actual body ends, so try to perhaps darken lines to show that its there.

thats my take. small crit, great picture '<img'>
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« Reply #4 on: July 25, 2005, 11:10:11 am »
The firs thing that I notice is the cleavage lines between the breasts.  They shouldn't go up as far as they do.  Actually, if she isn't wearing clothing then there should be no cleavage at all, as there is nothing to push the boobs up and together.  Also, watch the forearms.  They appear to be a bit long, and they should flare out a bit after the wrists, toehrwise they could end up looking too thick or too thin.  See the following picture the see that I mean about the flare... its a snippet of a picture that I did earlier thi year, I added the red line to help clarify what the muscles in the forearm do.



You may want to add a few definition lines to her belly, though it's not necessary.

Otherwise, nice line work, the hair is nice and flowy, the hips are nice ad curved (I always look for that, since it's one thing I had trouble with that when I first started out), and you emphasized the collar bone, which is a very good thing in my book.  ':p'  All in all a very good start.

In the future, you may want to shrink your pictures down for web viewing.  It is quite a big picture so I had to scroll all over the place to see everthing.  600 pixels is perfect web size IMHO.

Hope this helps.  **shrugs**




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« Reply #5 on: July 25, 2005, 12:14:47 pm »
Thanks very much for your comments, especially Wendell and Ulario. You've all been a great help.  '<img'>
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