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« on: May 10, 2004, 10:43:53 pm »
This is Chapter Ten, my last post for awhile as I am still in the process of writing chapters 11 and 12. I hope you enjoyed all these and look forward to getting the site up with furture chapters!



Blade Dance

A story by

JIM WILSON

© 2004 by Jim Wilson. All rights reserved. Story content and Characters herein are fictitious, any resemblance to any person living or dead or any actual event is coincidental. All images and material strictly copy righted to respected artists. Characters Delanne, Luki, Malu, Alana, Raul, Kekona, Lani, James Terra Flastif, Mister Thomas, or any other character other than specified. © Jim Wilson. Character Ce’Dra © Bobbie Wilson. Character Shoshana © Mellina Lathe-Steindler. Character Fixer © Robert Steindler. Character Nicole Felias © Felias


CHAPTER X

SYMBOLIZATION


Somehow, Malu managed to regain his regale as he stood before the line of students. As requested, Luki was there waiting for him holding a small wooden box and an odd shaped tool of some sort.

Smiling at his friend, he then addressed the class. “Before we begin symbolizing all of you into the new tribe, we will be honoring three lovely young ladies who have yet to be recognized.”

The three individuals of the newly formed pack of sisters fell silent and stared as Malu continued. “Delanne, Ce’Dra, Carrot, would you please come forward.”

Looking over each other, they each nervously stepped forward while Malu smiled then boldly spoke in a loud voice. “Delanne, daughter of Luki and Alana…Wolf and Fox of the newly formed tribe…Please step forward and stand before the elders of the tribe.”

From the tree line a gathered group of the tribe’s elders emerged from the shadows of palms, quietly walking in a straight line and then forming a half circle around Malu facing the class. Luki and Malu then proceeded to the group and joined them at the tail end.

Nervously, Delanne stepped into the center away from the comfort of her friends. “I…I am Delanne, daughter of Luki and Alana…I am Wolf and Fox.” Standing taller, she gained courage and continued. “I am of age and ask to be recognized.” Taking a deep breath, she proudly finished. “My wish is to be a dancer.”

A faint sound of giggles arose from the class. Delanne realized she’d made an error. I wish to trial as a dancer. The correct words refreshing her memory. A few of the elders she noticed only smiled, including her parents, Uncle Malu and Aunt Lani. Staying traditional within the small commemoration, Delanne walked over to the right end of the ark and stood before the first elder.

The first elder, a male white furred fox with grey hair exchanged both customary paws and embraced her. “You are of age Delanne, continue to grow.”

Nodding respectfully, Delanne moved to the next elder, a female squirrel with grey and white colored fur and blond hair. Exchanging both customary paws and embracing Delanne, she repeated the first elder. “You are of age Delanne, continue to grow.”

Next was Jayco, Ce’Dra’s father. Like her father, he was tall and shadowed her. Skipping the paw exchange his massive paws lifted her from the ground crushing her with a massive hug, his laughter being loud and boastful as always. “Ha Ha…Our little girl has grown up!” Setting her back down, he leaned in with a smile and whispered. “I look forward to meeting your friend.”

Delanne was blushing but her eyes widened. How many Therians knew of Jahmus? Jayco smiled pleasantly and finished. “You are of age Delanne, continue to grow.”

The ritual seemed to take forever, but it was a memorable moment for her as she finally reached the tail end of elders. Alana excitedly embraced her. “I’m so proud of you honey.”

Delanne held her mother tightly and then quietly asked her. “Who’s watching Jahmus?”

Alana smiled as she gazed adoringly into her daughter’s eyes. “He’s fine sweetie, I’ll be heading back as soon as we’re done.” Her eyes began to tear. “You are of age now Delanne, continue to grow.”

Next was Aunt Lani, who was already crying happily as she slammed a loving hug around Delanne. “My baby girl is all grown up.” She wept out as she began rocking Delanne in her arms. “Life is going to be so different for you now.” Releasing her hold, she wiped away her tears and smiled proudly. “You are of age now sweetie, continue to grow.” She began crying again as she embraced Delanne for a second time before allowing her to continue on.

Malu was smiling proudly as Delanne approached him. A single tear running down his right cheek as he embraced Delanne lovingly. “Vous êtes devenu une belle femme.”  (You have become a beautiful woman.)

Blushing at Malu’s comment, she answered him in the strange language he had taught her when she was very young. “Merci oncle Malu…Je t’aime.”  (Thank you uncle Malu…I love you.)

Chuckling Malu reverted back to the common tongue. “I love you too sweetie…You are of age now Delanne, continue to grow.”

On the end, Luki was smiling and embraced his daughter tightly. “We’re all so proud of you…You are of age now Delanne, continue to grow.”

As their embrace dwindled, Luki removed a white belt with red trim and presented it to Delanne. “May your trials bring good fortune to your dreams.”

Delanne’s eyes widened in astonishment. “But I haven’t even tried out for the class yet.”

Luki smiled as he replaced her red belt with the new one. “Your Aunt Lani is the teacher and she thinks you dance divinely…Your first lesson is after lunch.”

Crying happily, Delanne ran over to Aunt Lani and flung herself upon her. Lani was still crying happily as well. “You’ve been dancing in secret since you were a pup sweetie, I couldn’t help it.”

“Thank you Aunt Lani.” Tightening her embrace.

Lani tightened her embrace as well. “I’ll see you in class sweetie.”

Delanne wiped her happy tears and left the semi-circle returning to her place in line as Ce’Dra stepped forward to be recognized.

Ce’Dra began announcing herself to the elders as Carrot admired Delanne. “Wow, a training belt…you must be very good.”

Delanne blushed as she noticed Ce’Dra approaching the first elder. “Thank you.”

“I want to be a dancer, but I’m always falling over.” Carrot admitted sadly.

Smiling at the raccoon Delanne offered her help. “I can help you.”

There was a rather loud weeping sound coming from the ark of elders. Jayco was crying out loudly holding tightly onto Ce’Dra as Carrot answered. “I’m not worth the trouble; maybe I’ll just become a host.”

“Nonsense…It’ll be fun, if that’s what you really want to do…I would love to help you.” Delanne offered kindly.

Carrot shook her head. “I wouldn’t even be able to pass the trials to enter the class…but thank you for being so kind.”

Delanne opened her mouth to answer, but a bouncing Ce’Dra interrupted her. “Your turn Carrot!”

Carrot gave her an unhappy smile and headed to the ark of elders as Ce’Dra questioned Delanne. “What’s wrong with Carrot?”

“She wants to be a dancer, but she’s unwilling to let me help her.” Delanne answered as she over heard Carrot announce to trial as a host.

“NO!” Delanne burst out running up to Carrot’s side and telling the elders the truth. “Carrot wants to be a dancer!”

Carrot stood there staring at Delanne in shock as well as the elders and the rest of the class. No one in the history of the island has ever interrupted a fellow Therian being recognized or challenged their chosen path. Delanne’s family and Carrot’s father left the ark and came trotting over to the two young girls.

Keeping his voice down, Malu was the first to address the issue. “What are you doing?”

“Carrot wants to be a dancer; I can’t just sit there and watch her throw away her dreams.” Delanne answered.

Carrot turned to face Delanne. “Delanne, I appreciate you wanting to help me, but I’m horrible at it and now you’re embarrassing me.”

Delanne felt bad for ruining her recognition, but she was determined not to let her new friend do something she might regret later. “I’m really sorry Carrot, but I want you to follow your heart… please…I can help you learn.”

Red made his way around Malu and Lani. Only during her own recognition did she see him for the first time. He was for sure a raccoon, but he was completely white from head to toe and had the most interesting red colored eyes. “Carrot sweetie, do you really wish to be a dancer?” Red asked.

“I want to, but I’m no good at, I’m always falling over.” Carrot finally admitted to everyone.

Aunt Lani spoke while smiling at the young raccoon. “Carrot honey, if dancing is what you really want to do, I’ll allow you to join the dancers without a tryout and not having to embarrass yourself in front of the class if that’s what’s troubling you.”

Carrot slowly shook her head indicating a yes.

Lani put an arm around the tearing raccoon. “Then it’s settled, I’ll make Delanne your partner so you two can work together.”

“You’d do that for me?” Carrot asked unbelieving.

“If dancing is what you really want to do, then I’ll see to it you learn.” Lani answered.

Delanne anticipated Carrot’s rush to embrace Lani, however, the raccoon ran past Lani and threw herself upon the startled wolf fox, kissing Delanne upon the cheek and squeezing her tightly. “Thank you Delanne…That’s the nicest thing anyone has ever done for me.”

Returning the raccoon’s hug. “You’re welcome Carrot; you’ll be dancing in no time.”

Everyone smiled as Luki directed the small gathered group to proceed with Carrot’s recognition. “All right everyone, let’s finish the ritual.”

Delanne’s family and Carrot’s father headed back to their positions as the two friends ended their embrace.

Giving Delanne a quick kiss on the mouth, Carrot smiled teasingly at Delanne and waved a paw to her as she began her trek around the ark of elders.

“I can’t believe you did that.” An astonished Ce’Dra proclaimed upon Delanne’s return. “And you got kissed for it.” She added teasingly with a giggle.

Delanne studied her friend and decided with a blushing smile that perhaps now was a good moment to show Ce’Dra that she shared the lioness’s feelings. Leaning forward, she gently pressed her lips against Ce’Dra’s muzzle holding herself there as the lioness seemed to fall helplessly silent.

A warming sensation began to build within Delanne’s chest as she slowly pulled herself away from the hypnotized lioness. Smiling with a pride of accomplishment upon her face, Delanne teased Ce’Dra with a gentle giggle. “I prefer your kisses, they last longer.”

Ce’Dra was speechless as she stood there staring at the happily smiling wolf fox, who gave her a friendly wink and playfully waved a bushy tail in her face as she turned around to watch the end of Carrot’s recognition, but she was already bounding happily towards them.

“Look, I got a training belt!” The raccoon exclaimed excitedly.

Delanne gave her a welcoming hug. “That’s wonderful Carrot.”

Carrot smiled and offered a warming hug to Ce’Dra who accepted it openly.

“Vous me faites Delanne fier, je prie de s’effacer sur vous.”  (You make me proud Delanne; I’m beginning to rub off on you.)  Malu chuckled as he approached the smiling girls.

Delanne giggled and answered him. “J’essayais seulement d’aider la Carotte.”  (I was only trying to help Carrot.)  

Malu laughed dropping himself back to common. “That, you get from your mother.”

They shared a moment of laughter as Ce’Dra and Carrot looked at them both oddly.

“Are you girls ready for the symbolization?” Malu asked.

The three of them nodded simultaneously as Malu took a few steps back to address the class.

“If I could have your attention please.” He spoke loudly. “We are ready to begin the symbolization.”

Reaching into the box Luki had brought, he lifted out a small silver ring no bigger than the tip of a thumb and held it out for the class to see. “Since tattooing is considered confusing and deemed forbidden, I have come up with a new fascinating way to symbolize us.”

Taking the ring, he fiddled with it close to his left ear near the base and removed his hand. The silver ring looked as if it was a part of him. The class stared as he continued. “I call these earrings, and I have them in many different colors for your convenience.”

Grabbing an oddly shaped instrument made of wood from the box, he motioned for Delanne to step forward.

Swallowing nervously Delanne approached Malu as he picked up the box and tilted it so she could look inside. In the box were perhaps several dozen rings ranging in almost every color imaginable.

“You can choose any color you like sweetie.” Malu offered.

Looking through the box, she discovered that there were several colors she liked. “Only one?” She asked disappointedly.

The question surprised Malu, he hadn’t thought of that. Turning his head, he asked Luki for an opinion. “What do you think?”

Luki shrugged. “If you have enough for everyone to indulge themselves, I don’t see a problem with it.”

Smiling cheerfully, Delanne pulled out two silver rings and one gold ring and handed them to Malu.
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« Reply #1 on: May 11, 2004, 01:58:27 pm »
All I can say is that I can't wait to read the next two chapters. '<img'> Looking very forward to it. Ilike the emotions that you present in the story. A very good chapter. Thanks for posting it.

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« Reply #2 on: May 11, 2004, 02:07:50 pm »
'<img'>  Glad you liked! Who is your favorite character so far? What do like best about them? If you don't mind answering.
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« Reply #3 on: May 11, 2004, 02:19:07 pm »
Hmmm.... I would have to say that Delanne is a favorite. Reason is that she reminds me of myself in some ways. She's always ready to help out others and she puts others needs before hers. She seems to have a humble nature to her. I try to be like that myself. I've always been one to try and help others. So, she's become a favorite of mine. '<img'>

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« Reply #4 on: May 11, 2004, 02:57:33 pm »
':blush:'  I put alot of myself into Delanne and Jahmus. The others are other aspects of myself or friends that are close to me. I myself try to be very humble and gentleman like. I've always been fascinated with the 18th century (1700's)

Though I have an awful tendency to laugh, play and be very rambunctious at times!  '<img'>  '<img'>

I'm glad that Delanne's personality shines through, thats the aspect and idea of her I wanted to portray...Thanks!
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« Reply #5 on: May 11, 2004, 05:44:48 pm »
I can tell that you really did put a lot of yourself into those characters. I did the same in my first story with my own character since there is some truth to how the story was told. I was kind of mirroring life experiences in the story. That's cool that you have that interest in the 18th century. I'm going to be bringing in a period of time like that in my second story that I'm working on. My character is going to be learning about his distant past and it's going to be aboujt that time period.

*chuckles* I have a tendency to be like that sometimes. I am a river otter after all. '<img'>

You're quite welcome. Delanne's personality really shined through. You did a most wonderful job in doing that. '<img'>

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« Reply #6 on: May 11, 2004, 05:50:51 pm »
I so love your story. Keep it up. I love how much emotion you put into it.



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« Reply #7 on: May 11, 2004, 07:48:06 pm »
Thanks User_of_shadows Ii excites me that readers are enjoying the story and want more! I can't believe how comfortable I am when writing it. I enjoy it so much!

No worries about it ending anytime soon, I love writing it, and the story has a loooooong way to go! I hoping to reach at least 100+ chapters just in the first book! So keep your eyes open for future additions, as my story continues!

Thanks again for finding the story interesting! It means alot!  '<img'>
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