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Offline Vernsim

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« on: December 23, 2003, 05:18:57 pm »
Hi everyone! I've been writng a story, and I need a few opinions on it.Here's a basic overview:

  A young Barkha named Vernsim(that's how I got my username)is chosen to become an all-powerful spirit.Then he finds out that  the only enemy the spirits ever had(his name is Devoc) is threating every creature in the universe with an everlasting winter. So Vernsim goes to different planets, tracking down Devoc and saving helpless creatures.The first world he goes to is the planet of the Gath.There he meets Minto and Gillo, 2 little Gath.At Gillo's valley, Vernsim finds a new friend, Olli.Then he bids farewell to Gillo and Minto and he and Olli go to a shrine at the top of a hill, where they try to unlock an acient secret, but they end up fighting a raging gryphon!!

  WEll! That's it so far but whaddya think ?
Vernsim:"I like my freaky spirit powers, my little buddy Ollie, my staff,and my gryphon friend.I just don't like the cape. What about you, Ollie?"

Ollie: "Can I have your cape if you don't like it?"

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« Reply #1 on: December 23, 2003, 05:27:04 pm »
Sounds very cool, can't wait to see it '<img'>

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« Reply #2 on: December 23, 2003, 05:29:38 pm »
Hey, thanks. I'll be posting more as I write it. ':cool:'
Vernsim:"I like my freaky spirit powers, my little buddy Ollie, my staff,and my gryphon friend.I just don't like the cape. What about you, Ollie?"

Ollie: "Can I have your cape if you don't like it?"

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« Reply #3 on: December 23, 2003, 09:20:57 pm »
Am moving this to the art announcement forum, since it seems more appropriately placed there. '<img'>
 
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« Reply #4 on: December 23, 2003, 09:41:44 pm »
it sounds like ratchet and clank, but i loved that game so keep, up the good work



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