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Offline User_of_Shadows

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« on: February 06, 2004, 09:15:31 pm »
If you have time I ask you to read this and please write some feedback. I just want to know if this story is worth continueing or not. Thank you


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« Reply #1 on: February 18, 2004, 01:42:20 pm »
Hmmm... so I am the first one to comment?  I suppose not many read these forums.  I would definitly like to see more and I have some pointers if you would like.

You have much going on in your story though it may be a little difficult for readers to understand or to see all this.  Keep writing and then go back through later and read it as if you are reading it for the first time.  There is much that we see and hear in our heads as we write though someone reading the work will not know.  Try to draw a mental picture with words of the place and the people, their behaviors, etc.

This is from one writer to another... keep writing, nothing you write is bad... it may just lack polish that will come later.  For now just get all of your thoughts down on paper.
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