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Offline Firebreath

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« on: October 24, 2003, 03:48:03 pm »
Okay, so I've been working on this project for a while. I readproof myself couple times, but being a french canadian and english being my second language, I can hardly find all the mistakes I made.
So, I ask for your help. ^^;
And feel free to make comments too! Constructive criticism will be met gladly! ^^

I also offer the file in two formats for your viewing pleasure.
Prologue - HTML file (tested under IE 6, NS7 and Opera 7 without problem)
Prologue - TXT format. Encoded in windows format with line breaks

Questions? Comments? Insults? ^^;

-= EDIT=-
Just to mention, I personally rate it PG-8 (I don't know if such a rating exists in US) for violence. Yeah, it ain't a work of comedy. I can't do comedy. '<img'>
Your actual mileage may vary




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« Reply #1 on: October 25, 2003, 05:11:32 am »
Just reading throuhg it now. A bungalow only has one floor  '<img'> . I catch my buddies out with a joke about that all the time.

[EDIT]typo ':blush:'

[ADDITION]I like it. Can't wait for the full story.






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« Reply #2 on: October 25, 2003, 06:58:07 am »
I'm with Running_Wolf, think it'll be great when finished!
"Beyond the darkness is a door to the light,
A door to your soul...

When darkness falls
Allow the light of your heart to guide you

Hope burns brighter than any star
And will shine long after the last star dies"


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« Reply #3 on: October 25, 2003, 10:16:04 am »
very good well done dude!

cant wait 4 the final product!
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« Reply #4 on: October 25, 2003, 11:09:40 pm »
Running: Thanks a lot for that! I'll correct it ASAP... ^^;

As for everyone, thanks a lot for the feedback, and here's chapter 1. Again, in the two file formats for your viewing (dis)pleasure. '<img'>

Chapter 1 - HTML
Chapter 1 - TXT

Enjoy. ^^
And again, thanks all for the feedback!
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« Reply #5 on: October 26, 2003, 09:35:50 am »
Howls Firebreath,

Looking great, I like it.
Hope it keeps flowing smothly for you.

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« Reply #6 on: October 27, 2003, 09:27:43 am »
Your story is looking really good, can we expect any more soon (I hope so)
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« Reply #7 on: October 27, 2003, 07:00:43 pm »
Thanks you guys. ^^

Well, so far, I have up to chapter 8 written, tho I have to revise that last one and keep on writing. x_x
It makes up for 78 pages total, for those interested (and that'll only go higher... And, by the way, it's a trilogy, although probably not a book trilogy. '<img'> )

I'll post some other chapters as time come and I proof-read them again... I'll be hoenst, I still find mistakes up to today, and I've been doing that for couple months now. '<img'>
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« Reply #8 on: October 29, 2003, 07:24:04 pm »
Okay, due to a mistake on my part, you're getting TWO chapters tonight. '<img'>
Just don't expect frequent updates in the near future... it's approaching what I have so far, and fast. '<img'>

Chapter 2 - TXT
Chapter 2 - HTML
Chapter 3 - TXT
Chapter 3 - HTML

Enjoy!
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