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The Gods mercy
« on: July 24, 2003, 09:04:24 am »
May the Gods have mercy on your soul, for if I hunt thee they shallt bare the only hopeful eyes upon your weeping brow.

Brave words crumble to dust in thy mouth as thou stand before me, your executioner.

And lo'! Mine jaws steely bind breaks heart and waxy bone, brittle like ash against a hurricane.

What fortitude of little amend does thou hull hold in its last breath but that of hatred and rage, one snufed so easily out dispite its self spawned blaze.

Come then! Sound the horns to make mine essence aloft skybound!

May the Gods have mercy on your soul, for if I hunt thee they shallt bare the only hopeful eyes upon your weeping brow.



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« Reply #1 on: July 24, 2003, 02:38:35 pm »
Definatly a powerful poem!  Makes one imagine that they have to look over their shoulder and skyward for the swift talons and gnashing teeth of their undoer.
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« Reply #2 on: July 25, 2003, 01:14:33 am »
Yes it would make one think that wouldnt it? *Grins* But then...that is the point of this poem. You do better work then I in poetics. You should show off your work Ceed.
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« Reply #3 on: July 25, 2003, 12:13:37 pm »
Id be inclined to agree with river,  very powerful : ) im no good as a poem commenter..or any sort of commenter really, but seems anything you do you succede very well at ; )
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« Reply #4 on: July 25, 2003, 05:02:00 pm »
I have always thought you had a good grasp on wording things so that the reader gets a great feeling for the mood and message you intended, Midnight.

And yes, I am really looking forward to placing some of my writing within the folds of this great and welcoming place online.  When I return home, perhaps I could begin working on a website and applying for some space to use here to display my work.  Most definately I will be putting the Crimson and Xan adventures here.  They have sat on the disks and been shared so discreetly for too long.  Time for them to see the light! *Chirp*!

*Nuzzles and paints your snout with some river clay*
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« Reply #5 on: July 26, 2003, 11:51:53 am »
Clay...mmm...get some we can play with clay.
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« Reply #6 on: July 26, 2003, 12:41:38 pm »
Great poem Midnight Dragon.
A very powerful and strong poem.
I would like to see more of your work if possable.

*hugs*
Chaz
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« Reply #7 on: July 26, 2003, 10:39:44 pm »
I put my poetry up as often as I talk about myself personaly...you may be waiting years.

*Hugs back* Friendly floofy arent you?



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