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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #50 on: August 14, 2012, 12:21:13 pm »
That story of survival was a interesting read.
Nicely done Mylo.

How about the word "Reality"   :orbunny:

I would have said "Virtual Reality" But that's two words. :-[
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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #51 on: August 16, 2012, 05:20:36 pm »
what of the word Deck. That the word in my head right now, so....WRITE! :D

Space is cooler than card games, so here is the story for deck ;)

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Our ten year contracts had expired, the documents that required our habitation on the moon Titan.  We were supposed to be among the original colonists, but the hysteria, murders, and tragedy in ’92 paved way for certain regulations that would require definite time periods of habitation, before order could be taken to the distant moon, mankind’s latest venture beyond our point of origin.  It was our reinvigoration in space that kept us going, that kept me going.  It was strange and brilliant to live on the alien world.
I was a communications engineer, not space-borne, maintaining and repairing the giant satellite dishes on the surface just outside the limits of the colony.  No, I was definitely not space-borne, hooked on a cable and dangling on the main satellite in geosynchronous orbit above our colony.  That was too frightening for me.  My job was tedious, and I can’t say that I enjoyed it every day, but as I boarded the shuttle, all the memories swept past me of my contributions to this station, the friends I had made, the troubles and fear, and the sheer wonder and majesty of the giant ring encircling the planet Saturn in the sky.  My, I had never seen anything so beautiful.
I was reassigned to Earth.  It had been twelve years since I’d seen the planet, taking into account the two year journey I had taken in sleep.  It would be fourteen years once I woke up again.
Automated systems woke the commanders first, and then the commanders woke us all up.  It only seemed like one night aboard the Aurora, one of twelve massive cruisers that traveled between the Lunar Base, Mars, and Titan.  But as soon as I opened my eyes, I felt absolutely awful (just like the first trip); my eyes were more of a hindrance than anything and my stomach felt tight and very empty.
“You feel alright to stand?” asked one of the commanders.  Most were from Earth and had not been stationed in Titan for an extended period.  
My stomach contracted again…it had been about half an hour since I had woken.  
“Hey,” he said again, waving his hands in front of my eyes.  I could see things, slightly blurred though.  “Can you hear me?”
“No,” I said, then realizing that I could hear him but was responding to his original question.  “I mean, yes, I can hear you.  I can’t stand yet.  Just give me a minute.”
“Okay then,” he said, getting up to go check on the next person.
A few minutes later, most of my symptoms went down.  I mustered the strength to stand, but a commander came to my side to assist me in case I might fall; I guess I still looked off balance.
“Whoa there,” he said.  He had a higher voice than the first commander who greeted me.  “Hang on, let me help you.”
“Thanks,” I said with short breath.  I lifted myself up, my hand in his for support, and then stood on the cold ground.  I shivered a little out of reaction.
“Don’t worry,” he said.  “It’s much warmer up on deck.  We can get some new clothes on you right away.  Just go out the main exit to the health center—“
“Aight,” I said.  I knew the drill.  
“You know the drill then,” he said with a nod and smile.  Then, he gasped and ran for another person who had collapsed on the floor.
I walked off to the health center where I got my vitals scanned and checked, and then dispensers gave me a set of clothes to wear.  I’d have to wait to land on Earth to retrieve my own.
The deck seemed promising...there was always food and wide windows to view the stars.  I knew faces, but I didn’t know anyone as friends.  Yet.  I looked out into space first and saw the millions of lights that decorated the empty void, looking to see if Earth was anywhere in sight.  
“You’re not going to find the planet yet,” said someone behind me.  I turned around, facing another commander, a woman.  Her eyes reflected the light panels on the ceiling in such a way that it looked like two stars among space, her thick black hair.  
“You know when we’re landing?” I asked her.
“In time,” she said.  “We should be arriving in no later than a couple days.  Until then, you can go get your bed card.”
“You’re from Earth?” I asked.
“Everyone is from Earth,” she said.
“No, I meant…” I said.  “You took the cruise here and back?”
“I did,” she said.  She spoke in a very flat tone of voice.
I tried to make conversation.  “So…how is Earth?”
She looked at me with an expression that matched her tone.  “Earth is Earth.  You’ve been away for fourteen years, and I four.  Let me just put it this way…on my first trip back, I was absolutely stunned at how long I had been gone.”
“Stunned?” I asked.
“It’s a static life on the colonies,” she said to me.  “Fourteen years is a long time.  Longer on Earth.”
I nodded, not knowing how to respond.  She began to speak again.  
“Well, you should go get your bed key.  I need to go.”
“Oh,” I said suddenly.  “I’m…sorry.”
She nodded once towards me.  “Well then, have a grand day.”
“Yeah…” I said.  “You, too.”  Even as a communications engineer, I was very awkward in conversation.
She turned to walk off to the front deck exit, but then turned around and said one more thing to me.
“You will be amazed.”
Then, she went off.
I waited there to gaze at the stars, unaware of my starving stomach and the thousands of people waking up from such vivid dreams.  

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The next (and last DX) word is reality, perhaps of the virtual sort...

Wait...when did we get a spell check?  :o

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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #52 on: August 16, 2012, 10:02:59 pm »
How about the word "Reality"   :orbunny:

I would have said "Virtual Reality" But that's two words. :-[

And now, I am out of words.  :P  Here is the story for reality:

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“Now tell me, Mr. Takahashi,” said the newscaster, displaying his brilliant white teeth and luminescent eyes.  “Your invention, the Vire, has penetrated into so many American homes, and you all are preparing for a world launch in the coming months.  Tell me why do you think so many people have fallen in love with the Vire, why it has been adopted so quickly?”
They were both sitting on yellow chairs made of a reflective material, perhaps satin, facing each other with their eyes and facing the cameras with their bodies.  The newscaster had on a stark black suit, very modern and angular with the trendy elbow point, which directly contrasted with Takahashi’s white collared shirt, casually unbuttoned, with an old-fashioned polo collar.  Takahashi’s eyes were very heavy, as if the air around him was pressing deeply into the sockets, a result of lack of sleep or apprehension.  He smiled, revealing the wrinkles around his eyes and mouth, and brushed his straight black hair back out of his face.
“Well, I suppose I have to tell you of its beginnings then,” he began.  “I hope I wouldn’t be going over my time if I continue with the story.”
The newscaster smiled and nodded at Takahashi.  “That’s why you’re here Mr. Takahashi.”
“Well then,” said Mr. Takahashi in his soft voice.  It was rough, but caring and soothing in intention.  “I was working off of a now declassified grant from the armed forces research division.  They were very interested in the field of simulation, and they regarded me as a…knowledgeable person in that field…”
The newscaster let out a half laugh.  “Don’t be so modest!” he said with a smile.
Takahashi smiled at the newscaster and bowed to him with his head ever so slightly.  He continued.  “Well, my team and I were given a project.  They wanted us to build newer and better simulation technology for the military, for…cost and risk purposes.  Now, I’d written my thesis on this subject and I already had an idea for how to complete the project, given the money.  So now I had the two pieces of the puzzle.  It was my dream…”  His eyes were full of wonder, but now, they seemed to drift into pensiveness.
“But then…” said the newscaster.
“Then,” began Takahashi.  “Then the war.”  He said it direly.  “They cut off funding for the project and kept the research for use in the future.  I was so eager to work on the project, and my current patron, Mr. Michael Howard, took a great interest in the project.  He organized a meeting with my team, and I explained to him the concept, and then he told me something.”
“And what did he tell you?” asked the newscaster.
“He told me, ‘You talk so passionately about the subject but not its application.  I can see it in you, and I can see that you’ll bring it into fruition.  I believe in this project as well, but I’d like to adapt it…’  At that point, I told him, ‘… for everyone.’  He told me that we were on the same page so to speak.  We both liked the idea.  So, Mr. Howard organized a contract that would allow Mega Corporation to acquire a whole set of research projects from the department, including my own, at the time known as the Direct Virtual Reality Simulator and Interfacer.”
The newscaster sat back in his chair.  “Now that seems like a mouthful.  Good thing Mr. Howard’s PR department came up with Vire, don’t you think?”
Takahashi laughed, although what the newscaster had said was not funny to him.  “Yes, it was a good thing.”
“So,” said the newscaster.  “Can you tell us what all that means?”
“Oh, I’m sorry,” he said with a smile.  “Let me explain.  While traditional simulators have achieved virtual reality by means of obstructing and distracting the senses through immersive video screens, true surround sound, moving walkways, etcetera etcetera, this is limited by a number of factors like space, cost, and the ability for your senses to be fooled by the imitation of objects.  Now, that is the key word: imitation.  What my team did was to directly interface with your brain, replacing the sensory input of every sense in your body with alternate sources.”
“That pretty much just blew over my head,” said the newscaster with a chuckle.  “Can you give us perhaps an example?”
“Let me see,” said Takahashi.  “Okay.  So imagine you’re skydiving from a plane.  A simulator can let you hang, but you don’t feel weightless.  It can also immerse you in projected surroundings, but you don’t feel the wind in your hair or on your skin.  And if you see the source of projection, or the cables and motors that move you around, or the fans that push the air, or feel the head gear that covers your eyes, then the experience is lost.  But if you directly interface with the brain, bypassing all of the body’s natural sensors, and interface with virtual sensors…that’s when you can truly immerse yourself into a simulated reality.”
“Amazing,” said the newscaster.  “Absolutely amazing.”
Takahashi nodded.  “Now, you asked me before why so many people have adopted this technology.  With the Vire, the line between simulation and reality is destroyed.  People, I have found over the years, have a natural desire to escape.  Escape through movies.  Escape through video games.  Escape through stories and online worlds.  Escape to a better place.  In a way, I think the war has contributed to that, along with the recent economic depressions.  But perhaps this is just a part of human nature…”
“Yes yes,” said the newscaster.
“We tested it with a man who had lost both of his legs,” said Takahashi.  “He said it was like a dream.  We actually had to calm him down, because when we took him off the machine, he later told us it was like he had lost his legs for the first time.  The experience is so immersive, and everyone we tested it on was absolutely shocked.  My most memorable test was when we connected a blind woman to the machine.  She could not describe her experience; it was…incredible.”
“How inspiring,” said the newscaster.
“Then we tested it on other people.  All of them were asking when they could come in again.  Then word of it spread virally online.  Then, the Time article.
“I’ve got it right here,” said the newscaster, motioning to someone offstage.  A woman brought him the magazine, Takahashi’s face emblazoned on the red-bordered cover with a caption that read:
“The ‘New’ New World: How Akira Takahashi and MegaCorp Are Creating Virtual Miracles”
“But you see,” said Takahashi.  “That’s what I was afraid of.”
“Yes?” said the newscaster.
Takahashi spoke in a slower voice.  “I saw the word ‘virtual.’  I described my project…our project…as virtual.  But it wasn’t until I began to see the looks on their faces as they came out…of…of pure disappointment.”
“They loved it!” said the newscaster, trying to lighten the mood.
“Yes they did,” said Takahashi, ignoring the attempt at shift.  “They loved it too much.  After Mr. Howard introduced it to the public, I couldn’t object…the project was his after all, and it’s now best-selling.  They called it the renaissance we’ve been waiting for since the advent of color television.”  He chuckled, but his eyes still displayed seriousness.  “And then, when I saw the article in Time and read my interview, but especially the author’s word…”
“What word?” asked the newscaster.
Takahashi sighed.  “Miracle,” he said.
“But it is a miracle, after all!” said the newscaster with his famous smile.
“It’s also an illusion,” said Takahashi.  “And while the millions of people watching you and me right now are probably doing so through their Vire’s, there are billions around the world who I cannot help with Vire technology.”
“But you’re shipping them worldwide!”
Takahashi ignored the newscaster’s enthusiasm.  “During the tests, we could bypass every sense in the body…but if a person has nothing to eat and nothing to drink in the first place, then they will starve.  We found that even though we bypassed all the senses, except of course the vitalities, the mind is still absolutely connected with the body.  If the body dies, then there is nothing we can do for the mind.  Billions are starving around the world while we live out our dreams.  And I wish…I wish that we could all live out those dreams…but in the end, it comes down to one basic question: can I sustain myself for another day?  Will I starve?
“I see,” said the newscaster, leaning over with folded arms on his knees.
“No,” said Takahashi, his face carrying an expression of seriousness, perhaps even sadness.  “I don’t think you do.  I don’t think I do.”   

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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #53 on: August 17, 2012, 11:38:00 am »
Very good Mylo. The mind is the gateway to eternity.  Or extinction. 

Perhaps one day we all will be drifting through space exsiting only
as virtual brains in a machine. Or we could be now. x_x


How about the word "eternity"  :orbunny:
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« Reply #54 on: August 17, 2012, 12:31:05 pm »
Hmmm....Give Insanity a try?  8)
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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #55 on: August 17, 2012, 04:33:32 pm »
I dont know about you, but I dont like the idea of floating through space as as a virtual brain in some machine like Rabbit there. We may very well already be doing that anyways, but I dont feel too fond of the idea. :P  Just me though. (:

Hmm....since you keep running out of words, maybe you could so one up for Collar.  8)
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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #56 on: August 17, 2012, 07:31:55 pm »
I dont know about you, but I dont like the idea of floating through space as as a virtual brain in some machine like Rabbit there. We may very well already be doing that anyways, but I dont feel too fond of the idea. :P  Just me though. (:

Hmm....since you keep running out of words, maybe you could so one up for Collar.  8)

We have had spell check here on the forum for as long as I remember Mylo, it's the
button that's new to me..

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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #57 on: August 22, 2012, 02:32:42 am »
How about the word "eternity"  :orbunny:

For eternity, I wanted to use this word in a sense that we take for granted what we think is an eternity. 

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“You all ready?” the teenager said over his cell phone while looking outside at the darkening sky.  His hair was slicked up and back, his glasses thick-rimmed with a pristine sheen.  His suit was glossy and clean, bought specifically for that night by his affluent parents: his father, an executive marketing agent, and his mother, a graphic designer for the same company.
“What?” he said surprised.  “You guys take forever to get ready.”
A pause.
“Well, I know the limo isn’t here yet—wait,” he said, as he examined outside the window, noticing the stretched black car pulling up in front of the building.  “It’s outside right now.  Get down here!”
A couple minutes passed as the teenager alternated between glancing at his phone, outside, and the stairs to where his friends were getting ready.  And then, the hallway began to reverberate sound at a low volume, and then higher as the laughing of the couples became audible outside of the open door to the front of the building.
“Jun!” said one of the girls, referring to the teenager who had called them from downstairs.  She was wearing a pastel yellow dress and had her arm interlocked with her date, who wore a neon yellow suit, smiling from behind his tortoise shell sunglasses.  “Jun, we’re ready!”
“You’d better be!” said Jun with a chuckle.  He then began to speak melodramatically, “Now ladies and gentlemen, please follow me.  Our escort is ready.”
“There’d better be drinks!” said a teenage boy in a neon red suit. 
“I think there’s water in the ice bin Key,” said Jun.  “Now let’s see if we have everyone.”  He looked from left to right at the couples.  “Peggy and Brian, present” he said, referring to the girl and boy in blue, the former in pastel, the latter in neon.  “Key and Esther” he said, looking at the boy and girl in the same pattern of neon/pastel, this time in red.  “And, Ray with Emma,” bearing yellow in the same pattern.  “All here!  Wonderful!  Now please ladies and gentlemen,” he said motioning to the limousine. 
Ray took out his high definition digital camera, equipped with two lenses to capture three dimensional video, and recorded the group’s entry into the limousine. 
“Wow!” said Esther.  “This even has grape soda!”
“I didn’t know that,” said Jun.  “Here, let me get you a glass.”
Key blocked Jun’s hand.  “Let me,” he said, taking the glass while simultaneously looking into Jun’s eyes.  Key cracked open the grape soda, poured some of the soda into the glass, and then gave the glass to his girlfriend.  Esther took it and smiled at Jun while sipping.  But as she took another sip, the car jerked forward, and some spilled on the ground.
“Oh thank goodness I didn’t spill any on my clothes!” she said. 
“Don’t worry!” said Key.  “I’ll clean up the mess.”
While Key acquired towels from the center console, Brian turned on the radio to the city’s dance music station.  As the sound filled the car, Brian started to bob his head to the beat, taking Peggy’s hands and doing a miniature dance with her as she laughed.  Ray, with his camera in hand, was reclined with his arm around Emma, who was smiling at Jun since Jun was sitting alone on the single seat near the door.  The driver remained fixated with the road, expressionless. 
“Well, it is getting dark,” said Jun.  “Watch this.”
He slid his finger down a black plastic strip on the wall; immediately, the windows tinted until barely any light could enter, leaving the cabin black.  Suddenly, the group’s clothing began to glow, and motion patterns emanated from their attire in sync with the music. 
“Wow!” said Brian.  “That’s so cool that we can do this before the party!”
“I know!” said Esther.  “The patterns you suggested Peggy are beautiful!”
“Aw, thanks,” said Peggy. 
Their clothes illuminated the previously dark cabin with multicolored lights and patterns.  Key kissed Esther in her hair, and she pulled back and ran her fingers through her hair to fix it out of fear that Key had adjusted it.  Emma took Ray’s hands and tried to get him to dance, but Ray sat there staring into Emma’s eyes while trying not to laugh, his camera still recording but focused on the palms of Emma’s hands.  Jun marveled at the faces of his friends, their smiles, and their electronically lit faces, their eyes twinkling like the billboards spaced out all over the high rises of the city.  Then, each person took out a soda from the cooler, wiped the condensation with a towel, spilled some of the drink into a glass, and then put the remainder can in a cup holder beside them.  The driver remained fixated with the road, but smiled.
Key had his arm around Esther, but her eyes were fixated on Jun, who was sipping orange soda and planning the night out over and over again in his mind.  He glanced at Esther for a second.  She smiled and then turned back to Key, resting her head on his shoulder.  Jun’s uneasiness left him, and he began to feel the music.  He moved to it, realizing his friends were all around him, and everyone was enjoying themselves.  He took another sip of his orange soda, put that glass in the cup holder, and then took out his phone to check the time.  7:54 PM.  December 31, 1999. 
He smiled and forgot about the outside world beyond their limousine and their destination, a trendy club in the central city; he thought to himself, “We are young.”

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Insanity is next.

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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #58 on: August 24, 2012, 12:07:53 am »
Hmmm....Give Insanity a try?  8)

“What do you remember?”
“I don’t think I…”
“What do you remember?”
“I remember…a trench.”
“And what was in the trench?”
“It was red and tall…”
“And what was in the trench?”
“Nothing…”
“Nothing was in the trench?”
“Nothing…”
“Draw the trench.”
I drew the image in my head, the only image that was in my head as I was instantiated.  I traced out the left trapezoid with my finger, beginning with a line that extended straight down, another line horizontally, then a line diagonally up to the left slightly, and then a horizontal line to connect it with the start point of my drawing.  I then repeated the process in the reverse on the other side so that the bottom horizontal line touched the opposing one on the left side.  In my eyes, I could not see my drawing, but in my mind, I could see the crucial shapes come forth out of the inner cavities of my memories onto the space in front of me.  And then, I colored it red.
“So that is what you saw?”
“That is what I remember…”
“And what else do you remember?”
“Nothing…”
I was in a cave; it was lit by a hole at the very top with a murky grey light shining down.  The air was heavy and humid while the ground was soiled and filled with mud…strange I had not noticed this before; otherwise I would have drawn in it.  So I did.
“And that is all you remember?”
“That is all I remember…”
I looked up at the light over my head.  I looked at the shadow it cast on my hand as I dug my hand into the mud, watching the water fall away as the dirt formed patterns on my fingers.  I looked at the rocks on the wall…perhaps my eyes had adjusted to the dimness, for I had not seen the detail in the stones.  And then, I looked up again; I found a ladder propped up to the light, unmoving and precarious, made of a grey stone.  I lifted my feet with difficulty as I pulled against the suction force of the mud, but it gave way and I pulled myself to the first few rungs.  As I set my foot down on the next rung, I slipped.  Reflex caused me to grab the rung up ahead with both hands, but only my right hand was successful.  The inertia twisted my body, and my eyes met the ground, or at least where I thought the ground was.  The light did not reflect off the ground, and all I saw before me was a black pit.  The rungs of the ladder grew darker on the way down, completely disappearing into darkness only a few feet beneath me.  I turned around looking up to the light and began my climb again. 
I had to shield my eyes as I came out of the cave, but the entire sky was lit uniformly because of the dense cloud cover.  As I hid behind my forearm, I looked to the ground: it was white and smooth, like firmly compacted sand, or concrete with dust all over it.  And the air was cold…and dry.
Then I noticed I was wearing a coat, and I felt at ease for that fraction of a second that I didn’t shiver because of nature.  But then I remembered…how could I have seen my forearms before?
“What is your name?”
“My name?”
“Your name.”
“My name is…”
I tried to remember.  I could think in sentences…I could remember that the sky was supposed to be blue.  I could remember names and facts about everything.  I had experience, and I was capable, but it never dawned on me why I was…
“Why are you here?”
“I am here.”
“Why are you here?”
“Because…because…”
“Why are you here?”
I gazed towards the ends of the infinite plane, where earth met sky.
“What do you remember?”
“I remember…”
“What do you remember?”
“I remember…a trench.”
“And what was in the trench?”
“It was red and tall…”
“And what was in the trench?”
“Nothing…”
“Nothing was in the trench?”
“There was nothing in the trench…”
I closed my eyes and focused on the image in my mind…the overpowering red trench stood before me.  And then I noticed…
“…but there was something…under it…”
“And what did you see?”
I traced my finger in the air…up, down, up, and down, mouthing the symbol, and then doing the same as I traced the other three.
“M”
“E”
“G”
“A”
I opened my eyes to a great light, and in that light, there was a face.  It was my own.
“You are ready,” I said to myself, as it said the same words to me. 

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The next word is: collar.

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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #59 on: August 24, 2012, 11:48:58 am »
Interesting story on eternity Mylo. Time is eternal.

Nice job on insanity too.

How about "vacuum" :orbunny:
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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #60 on: August 25, 2012, 01:50:34 am »
Hmm....since you keep running out of words, maybe you could so one up for Collar.  8)

I thought I'd write a story involving a furry theme, considering the forum it's in.  ;)  So here is the story for collar...what furry doesn't like transformation experience stories?

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It was an amazing experience really, putting on the collar for the first time.  I felt the blood rush through my head; I felt light and dizzy, and I had to sit down before I fell out of exhaustion.  And that is when the thoughts started to course through my head, visual spectacles of all different colors and shapes.  I couldn’t see anything with my eyes because I had instinctively shut my eyelids closed, but I could feel the changes circulating throughout my body.  My head, overwhelmed from the images, began to ache.  My imagination was exploding from the crevices in my skull, and I shouted as if it were an ailment to the pain.  I yelled out.  I yelled again.  I scratched the ground and then hit it hard with my hand only to withdraw it after I felt the hard concrete bruise the side of my palm.  I clutched my fist, but felt something inside it.  That is when I opened my eyes and looked at my body, but only for a second, for the dizzying effects still lingered in my mind.  In that second, I saw my hand much thicker than before, with thick black masses on my palms and claws where my nails had been.  Stretching from the tips of my fingers to all along my arm was a light coat of black fur…I could still see my skin, but barely as the fur encapsulated every bare space on my limbs.
And after I had closed my eyes again, I began to see images of my face, the computer simulations of what was to come.  The pain shot out from my skull into the rest of my head, and my jaw began to ache, throb.  I scratched my arms and legs because the skin felt very irritated, like the feeling of a bad shave, or the feeling of wearing a wool sweater over bare skin.  The pain seeped through my neck and down to my arms and legs, and only now did I realize the pain in my hands.  I writhed on the ground, in agony, my body on fire.  At the time, I didn’t think of the training or of the procedure (they had injected a plethora of pain medication). 
I opened my eyes again to the unfamiliar sight of my temporary body: black fur sprouted from my legs, my feet, and the rest of my arms.  I wanted to feel my neck and my head, but I couldn’t because of the soreness of my arms.  My feet had lengthened, and I felt thick flesh, like calluses, underneath my toes.  Suddenly, I felt a sharp pain in my foot and my ankle.  I yelled out, but the pain still existed.  My breathing was clearly audible, raspy, and intermixed with cries of pain.  Then I felt the same pain in my mouth and my face.  This time, my muscles reacted on their own, and resisting the burning sensation throughout my arms, I reached for my face.  I hit my nose with force, knocking myself back and causing me to open my eyes again to see what I was becoming.  I couldn’t see anything below my sightline with peripheral vision; my nose…my muzzle…was jutting out in front of my face covered in the same short black fur.  I could breathe well, and I didn’t notice any blood in my nostrils.  I opened my mouth, sore but not as sore as before, and felt the inside of my mouth with my hands.  It was strange because I had lost a lot of feeling in my fingertips, but I could still feel my sharpened teeth and my dry tongue.  What had I become?
The originator of the pain had subsided, leaving sore muscles in its wake.  I was on my back, staring at the fluorescent lamp hanging from the ceiling, breathing through my new mouth and relaxing from the agony of the transformation.  I felt my neck with my hand: the collar was still affixed.  As well as catalyzing the transformation sequence, this device (so they told me) protected me from developing rapid and dangerous cancer during the growth steps.  I rested both my arms on the cold floor.  Feeling something underneath my back, I abruptly sat up, only to be greeted with a sharp soreness in my abdomen as I fell back down from weakness.  So, I rolled over and felt what was behind my back: an extension of my spine, a tail.  It was done, and as I rested there, I didn’t realize that I had closed my eyes and drifted into a dream where I could still hear the scientists come into the room around me, discussing the next phases in the project.
The project had virtually no military applications or scientific advantage.  I was now genetically diverse, but I could have been without alteration of my physical characteristics.  I was slightly stronger and faster, genetically designed for superior stamina, but once again, the changes in the physical aspects of my face and body could have been muted.  The military had already adopted robotic drones to do most heavy battle, and I was still flesh and blood…a gun could end me as easily as it could end a human.  Was I a human?  The scientists didn’t want to dabble in the ethics of the project, only the results and the procedure.  But the real instigator of this project was the mysterious patron, whom I had talked to on the phone for a single minute.  He paid the bills (and the scientists’ hefty salaries) in exchange for his mysterious passion for the project being realized.  That was the only reason.   
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The next word is vacuum.

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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #61 on: August 25, 2012, 05:08:33 am »
greatness has been achieved  :D

i think everyone loves a good TF story :) well done buddy!
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« Reply #62 on: August 25, 2012, 12:45:21 pm »
Nice story for Collar Mylo.. 


Not aiming to jump the gun, but how about  "distinguish"
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« Reply #63 on: September 12, 2012, 09:16:36 pm »
How about "vacuum" :orbunny:

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Hair all over the ground.  Orange fur.  Peter’s mother was vacuuming around the house when she came to his room.  The carpet in Peter’s room was covered in that fur.  His mom sighed and called.
-Peter?
He was in the bathroom.
-Yes mom?
-Your room, Peter!  Don’t tell me you let Drake’s dog in here again!  There’d better not be pee anywhere on the carpet!
Peter quickly drew up his shorts, flushed the toilet, and pumped a drop of soap on his hands (he had cleaned himself, but was relaxing on the cold porcelain).  He was thinking about something to tell his mom.
-Um…sorry mom.  I was…
He thought of a lie.
-Yeah, I’m sorry.  Drake brought Remmy over when you were at the grocery store.  Don’t worry!  I would have smelled something!
-Look at this mess!
His mother sifted through the items on the ground, making way for the vacuum cleaner.  She did not notice that the fur was orange and that Remmy had blonde hair; a labrador.
She gave up.
-Peter, you get out of the toilet and—
-I’m here Mom!
Peter slid down the hallway to the entrance to his room. 
-Clean all this up and then I’ll come and vacuum it.
-Got it Mom.
Peter acted normally…this wasn’t the first time he had hidden the fact from his mom.  About his new friends.  How long could it stay hidden?  The first time he had seen that girl wear ears in class.  And then he followed her.  She turned around, and he introduced himself. 
-Hi.
-Hi.
Peter had never asked anyone about this, but he felt brave today, hyped off of the caffeine in the Coca Cola he had that morning. 
-I noticed your ear hat…I think it’s pretty cool. 
-Oh, thanks.
She blushed.
And then she took him to her friends by the classroom.  Sure enough, he was friends with that guy who wore the fox shirts all the time.
-Hi. 
Peter was anxious, but better to pop the question.

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« Reply #64 on: September 13, 2012, 11:26:54 am »
Cool job on the word Vacuum Mylo. :orbunny: 
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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #65 on: September 17, 2012, 12:59:17 am »
Not aiming to jump the gun, but how about  "distinguish"

I was reading Typing's short story thread, and the idea of doing a comic for a word.  So I made one for distinguish.  :)




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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #66 on: September 17, 2012, 01:34:13 am »
I lol all over this kid. Good job on this one Mylo.

Paws was correct when he said greatness has been archived. Really good TF story for Collar. Maybe it's just in our blood, or maybe it's just an extension of our fascination with  becoming an animal, but a good transformation story will always be loved.


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« Reply #67 on: September 18, 2012, 01:34:57 am »
I've got one: wings.
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« Reply #68 on: September 19, 2012, 10:35:36 pm »
I think wings is a pretty word, after you do that one, here's another! :Alone:  I'd like to see your writing skills, sir (:
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« Reply #69 on: October 01, 2012, 03:19:54 am »
Ha ha! Well, nothing is exactly what your word is. Write...nothing! 8)

I've got one: wings.

I think wings is a pretty word, after you do that one, here's another! :Alone:  I'd like to see your writing skills, sir (:

Here is a story I wrote for all three of those words.  I wanted to get the entire story down in one sitting, so it may feel rushed, and I apologize for that.  

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     There was a time when I couldn’t spare a thought on the (what I thought of as trivial) happenings surrounding me.  Little did I know how much I would change based on adversity; little did I know that my future was not as concrete as I had imagined.
     A few days after I had turned nineteen, the northern border was crossed by our enemy.  We were almost a thousand miles away.  I had nothing to fear at the time; we were raised on the belief that our nation was the strongest in the world, that the will of God was on our side, and that our soldiers and army were the best in the world.  We were invincible.  
     That changed when I heard the first bomb go off in the middle of the night.  I awoke my brother who hadn’t heard the distant blast.  A few seconds later, my parents came into my room telling us to go down stairs into the basement.  I was afraid then, and I quickly escorted my brother downstairs.  He hadn’t the slightest idea of what was going on.  It was probably nothing, he must of thought.
     The night subsided with variable blasts echoing in the distance, but none so loud as to indicate that it was at any distance to do damage to our home or our neighbors.  That didn’t stop us from gluing our eyes to the television, checking the Internet for any developments, seeing just how far the invaders had come and how well we were holding up.  Just a few days later, an alert was issued ordering those living in a string of cities, including ours, to leave for the south.  My mother and father quickly packed their belongings as I packed mine and my brother packed his.  As we were zipping up our bags, my mother came into the room and told us that we needed to bring much more than that.  She pulled out our large traveling bags from beneath my bed, set it on my blanket, and told me to stuff it with anything that would fit.
     That would be the last time I would see my house for a long time.
     We arrived at a hotel along the sea after several hours of driving, several hours of listening to the radio and browsing the Internet on our smartphones, several hours of watching army vehicles go to battle in the opposite direction.  The crowd was horrendous…this hotel had been fitted as a shelter.  I overheard some people talking, something about a boat that was going all the way to Indospha.  I followed my parents to the army clerk that was directing people to appropriate settlements.  He told us that we would be at a ground level room with four other people, a variable number depending on how many people would show up over the coming days.  There, we waited.  The cell network was still operational.  The television worked; all the channels were broadcasting some sort of news about the invasion.  My mother would hug my brother tightly whenever he was scared; my father would converse with our suite mates about the invasion, army strategy, rumors.  The war was real, but it seemed so distant…  
     And then we awoke to a blast.  The window had been covered partially with some wood planks, but it was not enough to stop the glass from firing into the room as the heat filled the suite.  My parents told us to sleep in the back room of the suite, just in case.  Their suspicions were proven right that early morning, just minutes before the sun would rise, for the back room was protected from the window by a door and wall.  I quickly got up to see if my brother was okay and then rushed to open the door to the front end of the suite; I quickly closed the door when I saw that the windows had been blown in and that a fire was brewing just outside.  We waited in that room until a soldier opened the door, telling us to face the wall and walk out.  I didn’t see my parent’s bodies, but I knew they were dead; this was confirmed by a soldier taking role outside.  
     From then on, I only partially remembered what happened.  My mind was wandering between reality and my thoughts to the point where I could not distinguish the two.  I had the sanity to keep my brother with me, safe, to get on the boat to Indospha, to live in the poor country in poverty rather than death.  I had the will to survive for my brother and for my family.  Our memories seemed as distant as the war in the early days, slowly becoming a fantasy, something exciting to see as we kept up with the developments on the Internet and the television, until the war came home.  I was starving, scavenging through the garbage to find something for my brother to eat.  How quickly we had changed.
     I’ll never forget the dream I had before I woke up on that humid day to a foot in my gut.  My father, mother, brother, and I had gone shopping in the mall.  The walls were white, the stores were shades of red and white, and the merchandise was gold.  As my mother and father entered one of the flagship stores, I looked behind me, realizing my brother had gone missing.  I ran up to my mother, who didn’t seem to care…she told me he was probably somewhere else.  I went to look, but in the back of my head, I knew I was going to get lost, a premonition that would soon come true in my dream.  The lights in the mall went dark, and I didn’t know where to go.  Everyone had disappeared.  Then, my phone rang and the voice on the other side, my father’s, asked me where I was.  They were waiting for me at home, with my brother.  I was completely and utterly lost, and I didn’t reply back to my father…instead, I just stopped using the phone.  I had traveled here by car, and there was no way I could walk home.  And then, my vision faded to black as I realized that I was lying on the dirt ground, out of breath and clutching my stomach from the blow I had received to it.
     I saw a fallen woman near me…she had tripped on me walking through the crowded city.  It was particularly crowded that day.  I turned around to wake my brother…
     There was nobody there.  I turned around.  Nothing.  The woman had gotten up and walked away, but I didn’t care…  I shouted my brother’s name, searching every head in the crowd for him.  It was suffocating; my stomach hurt more from the intoxicating anxiety than from the woman’s foot.  I shouted and shouted; people gave me weird stares.  As I maneuvered through the crowd, I became frustrated and I shouted.  I felt a lump in my throat, and then a person shoved me to the side to make way for a never ending stream of people.  That’s when I lost it; I turned around and pushed him with all my strength, what little I had left.  I wanted all these people to just die.  I wanted them all to disappear, go away, something…why were there so many people!?  They all looked the same and gave me the same cold stares…they were poor, but not as poor as me.  
     The man turned around and punched my square in the face.  I fell to the ground…I could feel the blood from my nose seep down into my throat, like swimming underwater with your head facing the surface.  I got up.
     The man who had punched me had meshed in with the crowd.  I looked around, tired, starving, bruised, my eyes glazing over.  Maybe he had just gone out to look for food, or maybe he had…  
     I fell into a half sleep from a lack of it…my dream resumed.  The mall had changed now to resemble the street of clay buildings that my brother and I had called home.  The gold merchandise was still there, the wood supports of the buildings were red.  The sky was blue and white.  I found my brother (I had disregarded what my parents had said on the phone earlier); There you are!, I said.  But now it was a matter of getting home.  The ceiling to the mall was gone, and so, I rotated my arm in a circle like fashion, like a softball pitcher.  We rose of the ground, my hand clasped onto my brothers, my arm acting like a wing propelling us over the clay buildings.  When we rose, there was not another person beside us.  However, when I looked down, the street was filled with people.  I could fly, and we were going home.  I hoped that our parents wouldn’t notice that we were gone, and I was wondering how my life would change now that I could fly.  And then I looked down at my brother, who started doing the same thing with his arm.  He began to fly, too!
     I woke up.  The crowd was still there; my brother was not.
     I desperately searched the city for him over those next few days.  Every day, I would return to the same spot, hoping to see him there.  Every time I would leave to search, I would be afraid that he would come back to find me gone.  As my search dwindled, my fear overcame me and I decided to stay at that spot, the spot we had slept in for so long, and wait for him.  
     Days passed.  
     Days passed.  
     A man was looking for people to work for him…he offered me rice and a few coins.  It had been weeks since I had seen my brother, and by this time, I knew he was….
     I didn’t want to believe it…I took the job offer, stepping in a pot of murky dye for hours on end to crush the berries beneath.  Days passed.  My employer gave me another job to replace this one.  Days passed.  He sent me back to the street after he himself went broke.  Days passed.  I starved in the streets and awaited the return of my brother.  Days passed.  Another man wanted me to work in his factory for food, or at least, what he called a factory.  Days passed.  He sent me to another man who had bought the workforce of this factory.  Days passed.  The workforce was sold to a foreign woman who was supervising a large manufacturing lane, where I was the cog that snapped a small L-shaped plastic piece to a small T-shaped plastic piece.  If any broke, which they often did because the plastic was so cheap, my pay would be deducted.  I didn’t want to lose this job, so I avoided doing what my colleagues were doing: stuffing the broken pieces into their pockets to avoid being caught.  Only one person was fired for doing this…the workforce was always plentiful, our manager said.  Because of this, I began to do it, too.  I was very careful not to make the same mistakes that that one worker made.  
     I worked at that factory for nine years, making friends, talking aimlessly, watching people get severely injured by the machinery.  I was lucky to be healthy during those years; I was lucky to survive.  I normally didn’t pay attention to the date, a luxury that I had abandoned so long ago, instead only looking to the hours and minutes of my shifts.  My job was simple…snap those two pieces of cheap plastic together, then snap two other pieces of plastic together, then snap two pieces of plastic together to form a hinge, then check to see if other people snapped plastic together correctly and fixing it if they didn’t.  But one day, I looked at the calendar, realizing that just a few days before, it had been ten years since the day the bomb landed just outside that hotel by the sea, ten long years that had culminated into my life, being just shy of my thirtieth birthday.
     I had saved enough money to go back to my home country long ago…rumor had it that the war had ended and that reconstruction was nearing completion.  One day, I didn’t return to my post, leaving the factory for the port where I had scheduled to leave for home a few weeks ago.  I looked back at the coast, the grey sky.  I kissed my hand, sentimentally regarding it as my brother, and then watched as the smog engulfed the city far off in the distance behind the growing plane of water separating me from my past.
     And there I was again, back home, but upon closer examination, it wasn’t quite home.  I had visited the city where the boat had landed every year back before the war, but this time, it looked different.  There were more buildings, and the current ones had been revived with mirrored glass.  The billboards were animated, like moving paintings.  The soldiers who greeted us as we stepped off from the boat wore slightly different camouflage, and the flag, which had previously been red, white, and gold, was now red, white, and blue.  They aimed a strange camera at me, with a lens that looked horizontally elongated, and took a photo.  Directing me to a building on the pier, they told me to sign the necessary paperwork to gain access into the country; apparently there were so many refugees returning that the process was simplified.  I signed my name on a touch panel with my finger, typing information onto the onscreen keyboard.  After I submitted the form, a receptionist gave me a plastic ID card.  The picture on the front was a small video screen which displayed an image of my head; rotating the card while holding down my finger on the new seal of our country would rotate the image of the head in 3D.  At one time, I would have been amused by this, but I quickly slipped the card into my pocket and went about the next rounds of gaining access to this country.  
     I was told to give all of my foreign money to the teller so that they could put the corresponding dollar value onto my ID card.  It was convenient.  After this small transaction, I was free to go.  
     The city had a train now; it looked more like an airplane than a train.  I took a sip from the public fountain and bought a ready-made lunch for the trip, which ten years ago by car took about thirteen hours.  I wanted to go back to my city, back to my house, just to see what had become of it.  As I sat on the train waiting for it to take off, I noticed the people.  Some were from the invaders, some were of my race.  All were dressed in clothes that looked…odd.  One of them took out what I thought to be a glass plate, until of course the plate turned into a multicolor screen; a smartphone.  I looked outside.  There were people sitting on the public benches, homeless people sleeping on the public benches, people in rags, people in T-shirts, couples, people in strange clothing with material that resembled satin, people with clothes that illuminated and displayed moving images.  There was even a person whose face was animated.  But one person stood out in particular: a young girl with a ready-made lunch, standing by a support pylon, waiting for something.  Her mother and father came up to here, and the little girl greeted them with smiling face, holding the lunch up to her father.  Perhaps she was holding it for him.  The mother smiled and rested her hand on her protruding stomach.  The little girl put her ear up to it, her brow furrowed, her eyes aware…and then she jumped back and smiled.  I couldn’t help but smile as well as the train took off.  We accelerated faster.  Faster.  Faster.  I was getting frightened myself, and so I asked the person sitting next to me that we were going a little too fast.
     He replied, “Not so much.  You’ve never been on the train before?  Wait until we hit 500 mph, then you’ll see.  Don’t worry.”
     A few minutes later, we rounded a turn.  I wasn’t aware of it from the g forces…I looked out my window to see the ground from above as the train angled fifty or sixty degrees from the vertical.  The person beside me took a sip from their coffee as I stared in amazement at the ground.  He chuckled.
     So much had changed.  So little had changed.  
     Just a couple hours later, I arrived home.  My city had not changed so much over the years, although the scars of war were still evident in some of the buildings.  There were cranes everywhere, and army vehicles were present along the roads.  The cars all looked a bit different.  Two flags were waving on every crane.  The streets were black, repaved.  The traffic lights were not the circles I had grown up with; they were three bright bars.
     I walked on to my house…I was surprised at how my memories were flowing back so effortlessly.   An hour later, I rounded the corner of the familiar brick wall to gaze upon the hill where my house effortlessly stood.  I was nervous, imagining all of the possibilities.  It could be gone.  Perhaps rebuilt.  It could have been bought by someone else.
     My eyes met the familiar house, this time surrounded by an unfamiliar black gate.  I walked up to the gate, amazed that just behind this black metal stood my home, untouched by the war.  What had happened in ten years?
     A few minutes later, a black car drove up the road that led to the house.  The car pulled up beside me, and the window rolled down, revealing a woman perhaps in her early forties with white skin and jet black hair.  She wore a grey sweater that matched her grey eyes.
     “What is it Mommy?” said a high voice from the back of the car.  There sat a little girl in a car seat with the same jet black hair, dressed in pink; a cow jumped over the moon endlessly on the front of her shirt, with the moon occasionally smiling.  
     “Who are you?” asked the woman.
     “I’m so sorry that…that I…” I stammered.  I didn’t know what to say.  This had been my home, but in the back of my mind, I had been preparing for this moment.  
     “I can give you some money if you want,” she said.  “That way you can go buy some food.”
     “Mommy, who is he?” asked the little girl.  She held onto the paw of a stuffed bear dressed in the uniform of our invaders.  
     I hesitated, and then smiled.
     I told them my name, and where I was from.  I told them that at one time, I had lived in this house; that at one time, I couldn’t spare a thought on the (what I thought of as trivial) happenings surrounding me.  That I had a family and a brother.  I tried not to weep in front of her; she only apologized.  I thanked her for her offer in kindness, and then I turned around and walked the other way.  

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Re: Mylo's Short Story Challenge!
« Reply #70 on: October 01, 2012, 11:51:35 am »
Unfortunately a story that many victims of war could relate to..

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« Reply #71 on: October 01, 2012, 02:21:30 pm »
Unfortunately a story that many victims of war could relate to..

Nicely written Mylo :orbunny:

Thanks for reading it Old Rabbit; it was kind of long...  I don't feel like I did this story justice after reading over it, but how am I to know when I'm just imagining everything?

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« Reply #72 on: October 01, 2012, 11:32:49 pm »
I read this short story this morning. I loved the imagery invoked and the sadness is gripping. You ought to be published, sir!  (: I also liked the way you included the word wings.

If you have the time, please write a story around the word pugmarks(: (Those are pawprints btw)
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« Reply #73 on: October 01, 2012, 11:43:11 pm »
I read this short story this morning. I loved the imagery invoked and the sadness is gripping. You ought to be published, sir!  (: I also liked the way you included the word wings.

If you have the time, please write a story around the word pugmarks(: (Those are pawprints btw)

Thank you Iara.  I'll work on your word sometime! ;)

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« Reply #74 on: October 08, 2012, 03:03:09 pm »
I love the stories so far. New word. How about Dragon?
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