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Offline Serra Belvoule

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Good for you
« on: September 15, 2010, 11:06:16 am »
It's been so long since I last posted here... and longer still since I used this space as my starting point on my writing.
Thank you for being here all this time.
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I close my eyes to the unknown
And try to hide inside my mind
The words I want, I cannot find
I want to be left on my own

They're all a pest and a nuisance
I hear the same thing everyday
The buzz and shimmer won't go away
Can you, will you shut up for once?

Words of soot, blood and deception
filth of human malformation
Overwhelming information
and the shiny box of fiction

Crash them all, burn them to the ground
destroy them all, kill them on sight
they were the ones to start the fight
with their endless consuming sound

Hear their screams, hear their roars
Every filament creak and burn
With an eerie moan they will exhale
And then, nothing
I ate a bag of grapes and now I own the world.

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Re: Good for you
« Reply #1 on: September 15, 2010, 12:04:02 pm »
Great poem, I don't see too many 1-4/2-3 meters. I generally write in 2-4 meter myself so its nice to see some examples of other styles.

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Re: Good for you
« Reply #2 on: September 16, 2010, 04:27:27 am »
Lovely stuff, really nice tone, great work! :D

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Re: Good for you
« Reply #3 on: September 18, 2010, 08:03:51 pm »
Thank you, Liedt and Bai. Furs appreciating my works was what really got me into doing something with it :3
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Re: Good for you
« Reply #4 on: September 24, 2010, 02:31:42 pm »
I'd love to see more of your work :D

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Re: Good for you
« Reply #5 on: September 24, 2010, 08:46:47 pm »
Thanks Bai! I used to upload my writtings at http://serratiger.furtopia.org/ but now it's gone.
I'll try to repost some things here, then.
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Re: Good for you
« Reply #6 on: November 07, 2010, 04:15:13 pm »
"Hear their screams, hear their roars
Every filament creak and burn
With an eerie moan they will exhale
And then, nothing"


I have no words for this, it's powerful!

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Re: Good for you
« Reply #7 on: November 07, 2010, 09:59:15 pm »
Thank you very much, Xelhua.  :-[
I ate a bag of grapes and now I own the world.