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Offline Plantan

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The smell of the need (please leave comments/critiques c:)
« on: June 25, 2013, 09:49:07 pm »
The smell of the need 
The need to rain
The rain depresses and enlightens
The enlightened rule the lowers
The lowers revolt violently
The violence causes death
The dead rot below the ground
The ground is alive 
The alive destroy
The destroyed can't help but lose hope 
The hopeless abuse 
The abused cry
The crying become depressed
The depressed become dependant
The dependant are alone
The lonely use
The used don't trust
The not trusted are ignorant
The ignorant are blissful
The blissful prance
The prancing keeps reality
The reality is that none of this exists 
The loveliest day I ever had, was the day when tomorrow never came.

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Re: The smell of the need (please leave comments/critiques c:)
« Reply #1 on: June 25, 2013, 10:51:25 pm »
Oh god... That is amazing Plantan... Such a horrible truth, but you wrote it so beautifully... Just, wow. Very well done.