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Offline dodbringr

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Would You Miss Me?
« on: May 21, 2013, 01:47:05 am »
We know this probably sucks, but we wanted to get it out to the world anyway. We've felt this way for a while, but we weren't sure how to voice it.

Would You Miss Me?

Drowning in my sorrow
Sins left for you to bear
It seems all I've ever done is take
And you always tried to care

I can't find my way again
It's gone from my sight
My heart leads itself nowhere
All the while burned with spite

Life seems to be weary of
putting up with the likes of me
But I can't bear to end it all
without trying once more to see

In the end it wouldn't matter
if i was gone and dead
and everyone I've ever know
would have no tears to shed.

Would you miss me if i was gone?
would you miss me if i died?
Would you miss me if i was leaving
and it was only i who cried?

I know it seems selfish
to think of just my pain
But did you ever stop and really think
could it really be a gain?

My deeds are noted in a moment
then forgotten instantly
Bringing all the pain that comes with loss
such as pain and misery.

A thousand times I've tried to help others
trying to make a change
But there's no value in self-sacrifice
in fact to most it's rather strange

In short there's no more need for
the things i've tried to be
So the only question i have now
is will you remember me?

Would you miss me if i was gone
Would you miss me if i died?
Would you miss me if i was leaving
but it was only I who cried?



Again, feel free to tell us how bad it is. We didn't expect it to be good anyway...

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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #1 on: June 16, 2013, 05:22:40 pm »
I really like how it's set up dod... And you shouldn't be like me and be hard on yourself...
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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #2 on: June 17, 2013, 05:33:49 pm »
This is a beautiful poem<3 Very sad :'(
Please write more then write a book filled with them ;)
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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #3 on: June 18, 2013, 01:56:33 am »
Yep, that about sums up half my life... as sad as it may be... good poem.

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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #4 on: June 18, 2013, 02:37:31 am »
That poem is beautiful, but what is it about.
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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #5 on: June 18, 2013, 07:22:35 pm »
That poem is beautiful, but what is it about.

Well, basically, we were really depressed when we wrote it, and we kept wondering if anyone would care if we died that night. We're over it though, so don't worry.  :)  It was kind of a "compulsive poem", which is what we call it. If an emotion hits us just right, we immediately try to express it in writing.

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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #6 on: June 18, 2013, 08:40:09 pm »
You too,  eh?  yeah, depression just plain suck, huh... hope you don't have to deal  with it as much as i do...

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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #7 on: June 25, 2013, 05:01:13 am »
That to me was beauty in the form a words, it had a dark sweetness to it.  And honestly I could make that into a song, those would be beautiful lyrics as well
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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #8 on: June 25, 2013, 05:54:47 am »
Dodbringr
the answer is yes
we would miss you, terrably x

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Re: Would You Miss Me?
« Reply #9 on: June 25, 2013, 03:51:05 pm »
That to me was beauty in the form a words, it had a dark sweetness to it.  And honestly I could make that into a song, those would be beautiful lyrics as well


We'll be honest, we sang it as we wrote it. We're glad you like it though.